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经典图书 MechanicalEngineerResume
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DearEric,
Itwasapleasuretobeabletoassistyouwithyourresume.AfterreviewingyourextensivebackgroundandexperienceasaCADOperator,Iselected“DesignOne,”(ProfessionalResume)becauseithighlightsyouraccomplishmentsandprofessionalbackgroundinadirect,unclutteredmanner.ThisresumeiswrittenintheTimesNewRomanfont,whichconveystheformalityandprofessionalismassociatedwithsomeoneofyourexperienceandseniority.
Istartedoffbycenteringyournameinlargeandsmallcapsatthetopofthepage.Asyou’llseeit’salarger,boldedfont.Thissetsitapartfromtherestofthetype.Youraddressisdirectlyunderyourname,andyourphonenumberandemailaddressareflushleftandright,respectively.Asyou’llsee,yourcontactinformationisinaslightlylargerfontthanyouraddress.
IbeganthebodyofyourresumewithaQualificationssection,emphasizingthosepointsyoustatedonthegoalandskillsassessment-i.e.solidindustryexperience,strongattentiontodetail,abilitytogetthejobdonerightthefirsttimearound,abilitytopassinformationalongandmixwellwithothers.
Inwordingyourqualifications,Ichosetostartoffwithastrongblanketstatementaboutyourexperience(“Accomplished,seasonedManufacturingEngineerwithasolidbackgroundindesign,layout,anddetailforproducts,tooling/fixtures,andspecialmachinery.”)ThiswillgivetheHiringManageranideaofexactlywhomheisdealingwith.Ialsoelaboratedonafewofyourlesstechnicalskills,suchasthefactthatyouhaveahistoryoffinishingprojectsrightthefirsttimearound,aswellasyourpenchantformentoringjuniordesignersanddetailers.
IendedtheQualificationssectionwithabulletpointedlistofsoftwarewithwhichyouhaveexperience.
AfterhighlightingyourqualificationsIlistedyourprofessionalexperience.Youhaveaverystrongbackgroundandextensiveexperienceinyourindustry.Thechallengewastoprovideasmuchinformationaspossiblewhilenotclutteringyourresume.Generallyspeaking,aresumeshouldnotlistjobexperiencebeyond15years,soasnotto“date”theapplicant.ThisiswhyIelectedtolistyourprofessionalbackgroundonlytoPenstrolEngineering.
Ire-wordedyourbulletpointsformoreimpactandemphasisonthescopeofyourabilities.
Forexample,inyourproposedfirstbulletpoint,youwrote:
“AutoCAD2000(Windows98)”
Ire-wordedthis,withthehelpofyourdetailedexplanationofyourjobduties,formoreclarityandimpact:
“Createdassemblydrawings,includingbillsofmaterialsanddetaildrawings,forthedesignofcorrugatedfinishingmachines,primarilytheHyfleXpressflexofoldergluer”
Inaddition,youwrote(inyourworkdescription):
“Workwithmachineoperatorsandbuilderstoachievehighqualityandcosteffectivedesigns.”
Irewrotethistosay(thirdbulletpoint):
“Solicitedfeedbackfrommachineoperatorsandbuilderstodevelopdesignsoftheutmostqualityandcosteffectiveness.”
ThissoundsabitmoreactiveandillustrateswhataconscientiousMechanicalDesignerwoulddo:It’snotasthoughyouoperateinavacuum;instead,youactivelysolicitinputfromthepeoplewhoknowaboutthemachinery.
Inthenextposition,Ioptedtofocusmoreonwhatyouweredesigning,ratherthanonhowyoudesignedit.(Example:“Designedandcreatedassemblydrawings,includingbillsofmaterialsanddetaildrawings,forworkholdingequipment,primarilyspecialjaws,chucksandtoolholders.”)
Insteadofrestatingyourdutiesinthenextlisting,Icreatedactivestatementswithmoreimpact.
Forexample,youwrote:
“Checkingnewdesignsanddetaildrawings,correctingforworkability,customerstandardsandcosteffectivefabrication.”
Irewrotethistosay:
“Evaluatedandadjustednewdesignsanddetaildrawingstoensurepracticalcompletionwhileadheringtocustomerstandardsforusageandbottomlineexpenditure.”
Inaddition,youstatedinyourassessmentthatyouwere:
“dealingwithmanycustomersandstandards,bothlargeandsmall.”
Irewordedthisparticularpointtoread,
“Functionedasproductandprocessinformationsourcetodiversecustomerbase.”
Thisindicatesthatyouwereresponsibleforkeepingcustomersinformed,whetheritbeontheactualproduct(usage),orontheprocess(timeframe,costs,statusreports,etc.).
Fortheremainingjobs,Ikeptthedescriptionstoaminimum.Ofcourse,bythetimewegettopagetwoofyourresume,it’simportanttokeeptheinformationbriefandconcise.Wedon’twanttokeepelaboratingonyourexperienceusingthesameverbiagethatweusedinyourfirstthreepositions.TheHiringManagershouldknowbasedonyourtitleofCADOperator,whatyouweredoing,especiallywhenwe’vegivendetailsonpageone.
Inordertoshowyourhands-onexpertisewithspecificsoftware,Iendedeachofthejobdescriptionswithalistofthesoftwarethatyouusedwhileinthatposition.
Eric,thankyoufortheopportunitytoassistyouwithyourresume.EverydecisiontomodifyandexcludematerialwasinkeepingwiththeguidelinesandstandardsoftheProfessionalAssociationofResumeWriters(PARW).
Withthisresume,younowhaveapowerfultoolthat’spackedwitheasilyaccessiblematerialwhilealsobeingaestheticallypleasing.
Itwasapleasureservingyou.Bestofluckinallyourfutureendeavors.
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